2014년 12월 7일 일요일

Final draft


          In the morning, you wake up, hearing the news of war in the Middle East or the fights between politicians. On the subway to school or work, you find the people who are trying to ignore the homeless reaching out their hands for money. You watch some people fighting on the road with their cars crashed. In this endless cycle of life, you may once have thought and desired to live in Utopia. For a long time, maybe during the existence of human beings, a perfect world was a dream and a desire to be achieved. We can easily think of numerous novels and movies that depicted Utopia from long time ago. As people are living in a world full of problems - poverty, crime, hunger, disease, war and corruption- people craved a world free of conflict, hunger and unhappiness. Thus, the concept of Utopia began to exist. Utopia is a word Thomas More invented when he wrote a book named Utopia. By coining the word utopia from the Greek ou-topos meaning ‘no place’ or ‘nowhere’, he made the word Utopia, but this was considered as a pun because the almost identical Greek word ‘eu-topos- meant a good place (British Library,  n.d.).Thus, the word Utopia intrinsically contains the question whether the perfect world can exist in reality. There were always controversies regarding the question. However, I strongly insist that Utopia cannot exist in the real world.

          Utopia has been a hot issue for everyone living the reality. Every person living in this world is dreaming of their Utopia. Think of how much revolutions and wars were made, and how much people fought to achieve Utopia historically. According to the British Library,  from 18th century, utopian ideas exploded into actions (British Library,  n.d.). Condorcet, Rousseau's opinions were enough to enlighten people to recognize that they have right to claim Utopia. Thus in America and France revolutions exploded. 
          Compared to the history, it's true that the world seems to develop in a better way. As the technology is developing rapidly, people started to dream that technology can actualize Utopia. Technologies make people meet their family every day by using video calls, go wherever they want to go by getting on an airplane and cure disease using techniques of medical treatment. Thus, nowadays people dream of bright future which is considered as Utopia. 
         In addition, many novels that describe Utopia show people's interests toward it. The first people who invented the word Utopia is Thomas more. He wrote the book Utopia and defined Utopia on his own (British Library,  n.d.). In his book, the society exist on the island and people living in there have no money. People move to other houses every 10 years to avoid obsession to their belongings. Selected officials govern the country and these officials have intellectual capabilities. As people should share equal wealth, this society resembles that of communism. 
          Not only in literature, there are many people attempting to actualize Utopia in real world. New haven, Society of the woman in the wilder, Ephrata cloister, Shakers, Harmony, Nashoba, New harmony, Brook farm, Kindgon of St. James, Oneida, Icaria, Fountain Grove, Kaweah, Roycroft, Point loma, Halcyon, Holycity, Peace mission of father divine, Drop city, Hog farm, Twin oaks, Family of mystic arts, the diggers, the farm are Utopian societies that are discovered (Yale University Beinecke Rare books & Manuscript Library,  n.d.).  However, if you think these Utopian communities were just the old story you're making a huge mistake.
          If you type in "Marinaleda" in the search engine, you will find many interesting articles regarding this small village in Spain. You can read it from the New York Times and  the Wall Street Journal. According to an article from The New York Times,  Marinaleda has gained a huge attention recently from the progressive press. It is located 70 miles east of Seville in southern Spain's Andalusia region and this small farming village (population: 2,771) has set out to build a Communist utopia since the late 1970s (Burnett,2009). In addition, according to an article from The Wall street JournalMarinaleda is "probably the most pleasant Communist society on earth". Also author said that there is a complete absence of a police force, mechanization is avoided at all costs in order to make as many people as possible do physical work and it offers new residents home for just €15 per month (Ahmari, 2014). What I wanted to emphasize is that there are people trying to achieve real Utopia and there were lots of efforts to make Utopia. Now, after introducing the history of  Utopia, the novel related to Utopia and many Utopian villages which existed and which still exist, it seems to be sure to you that people have a strong desire to actualize the Utopian world. However, in my opinion, people's attempts to actualize the Utopia won't end because Utopia can't exist.  

          I insist that Utopia can’t exist in reality. There are several reasons why. First of all, every person has different standards toward the perfect world. This is a simple thought that everyone could think of. I mean everyone wants different things because their personalities, jobs, environments, experiences, amount of money they have, family are all different. When you simply ask ‘What is your great pleasure’ to your friends or family members, they will answer all differently. The perfect world means that it can all suffice everyone’s desires and needs efficiently. But as long as everyone wants different things, it is totally impossible to make up the perfect world for everyone. The world that is perfect to you can be a Dystopia to other people. In our real live and history, people fought and started a revolution to get what they want because the disparity between people’s opinions and interests could not come to an agreement. Let me introduce French revolution as an example (British Library,  n.d.). Due to the France’s failure to feed its population, the exclusion of the growing middle class from political power and public's reluctance to support an oppressive feudal system, the revolution was caused. People tried to escape from the reality that oppressed themselves and tried to make the world where every citizen can live happily. It brought down the monarchy, the aristocracy and the church, so old regime in France ended. However, does everyone living in the world wanted the revolution to occur? No. What I want to emphasize from the French revolution is that even though majority of the men living in France wanted the revolution, not all of them wanted it. This is because every person wants different society and rules. It is especially obvious when we watch the conflicts between rich and the poor which still exists today. And we already know these conflicts have been happening and will keep happening. 
          In addition, Utopia cannot exist because people must compete.  Nowadays, most of the social problems occur due to the income inequality and rich get richer and the poor-get poorer cycle. Thus, to prevent these problems, previous Utopian societies inhibited the possession of money and shared all the resources together. And by equalizing the income, they forced people to accept uniformity. However, historically, it was proved that this kind of method is not appropriate to human beings. Communism which failed clearly shows the fact. Communism was one way to make Utopia. Communism is a political and economic doctrine that aims to replace private property and a profit-based economy with public ownership and communal control (Encyclopedia Britannica, n.d.). This was made in order to save citizens from sweating system and violation of human rights. However, when this was adapted to our reality, the fact turned out to be different. People worked without competition and incentives. Thus, it led to the poor performance of economies. Even if competition may lead to income inequality and conflicts between people, competition between people is the basic component of the community and society of human beings. Here is where contradiction occurs. With competition, Utopia cannot be achieved. However, without competition, lively social-economic activities cannot be made.
          Also Utopia cannot exist because every human seeks their own pleasure and interest. To be short, humans are selfish. This is not a problem of individuals’ personalities. This regards to the principle of evolution. In 1976, Richard Dawkins published a book named “The selfish Gene”. It is a book that described a gene-centered view of Charles Darwin’s theory of natural selection. He argued that individual genes adapt and evolve, using organism’s body as a survival machine for its genes. Due to this mechanism, human beings become selfish. All altruistic behaviors are made in order to maximize one’s inclusive fitness (Dawkins, 1976). Some people will think this point of view as awkward. However, this book is called as the classic of evolutionary biology. Even though there are some people arguing that this 'selfish nature' of human can be overcome by our smart brains. However, we can see many proofs that reinforce the idea of humans selfish nature which was not overcome by the human brain. Just think of babies fighting for a cookie. People act on their own interests. Everyone can accept this as a fact. However in Utopia, everyone cannot pursue their interests freely because it makes the society hard to maintain. Thus, many novels that depict Utopia, as I mentioned before, restrict people’s desire. However, that kind of Utopia cannot sustain as long as people are selfish. 
          To be simple, to overcome the problem of peoples' endless greed, equality can be the key to Utopia. Everyone can share their belongings so that there should be no poverty. By sharing equal amount of resources, we can prevent conflicts and fights between people.  However this idea leads to the devastated results. As I mentioned before, communism was the way to express and actualize the Utopia. Equality and uniformity were the important rules. However, communism failed. Why did this happen? It's because humans are naturally selfish. Thus, even the leaders of the country could not bear the natural traits. Not even saying about communism, all of the social issues such as politicians and businessmen's bribery and embezzlement of government money,bankruptcy etc occur because of people's greediness.
          However, there are some people arguing that Utopia can exist. They can find research which was published in Nature communications by scientists saying humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative environment by being selfish (Melissa, 2013). They might want to use this source as counter argument for my reasons that go "Utopia cannot exist because humans are selfish". Some may say that this challenges a previous theory which suggests that it is preferable to be selfish and put you first. Using this source they might argue that because people evolve in a co-operative environment by being altruistic, Utopia can exist. However, according to an article from the Guardian all of these experiments were conducted in a laboratory, with only computer simulations. It seems that when that mathematics is fitted to the wild nature, it will pretty soon break (Brown, 2013). This new research suggests that co-operation helps a group evolve, but does not mean that the selfish gene theory of evolution is wrong. Thus it is obviously right in saying that as long as people are controlled by selfish gene, regardless of possibilities of altruistic behavior, humans are originally selfish. Also some might argue that as technology develops, one day, human society can be perfectly controlled by it. Thus they can argue that by developing new technology we can make Utopia. However, this argument is totally absurd. Historically, as technology developed, new problems came out. According to Harry R. Lewishistory is an endless cycle of control and new technology (Lewis, 2011).  New technology usually brings not only convenience but also the social instability and new problems. Even by the time society becomes stable, by finding new ways to cope with new technology, other new technologies give birth to unanticipated problems. Thus, even if new technology can make our lives more comfortable, it cannot totally change our societies into Utopia.
          Therefore, Utopia cannot exist in reality. It's because firstly, people have different standards toward Utopia, which we can easily recognize when we see the endless fight between the poor and the rich. Secondly, people should compete. Through competition, people can get incentives especially when they perform better than any other or invent new things that other people could not think of. Even if competition can occur problems and block the way to Utopia, it is the basic component of human society, which helps each member of society to perform better. Thirdly, humans are naturally selfish. Undeniably, people are controlled by their own selfish gene. And even, it's unnecessary to mention  Richard Dawkins, because there are so many social issues which show the greediness of people such as bribery and embezzlement. 
          Some can say that my argument takes away the last hope for the humanity. However, I am not saying that our society is full of selfish and greedy people and severe competition so that we don't have any hope. I am not saying that we can't make our future brighter. Like I mentioned before, all I want to argue is that we must learn how to use the concept of Utopia in our own lives. And to do that, I insist that understanding the concept of Utopia correctly, understanding Utopia as the thing that we can’t achieve even if we should always try to achieve, is the most important thing.  
          If we continue daydreaming about Utopia, which does not exist, it is obvious that so many precious opportunities to change the society will be lost. If we continue believing in Utopia, we must or try to ignore the innate greediness of human, the necessity of competition and diversity between people. However, if we stop dreaming about it, if we notice the nonexistence of Utopia, then we can finally have a critical perspective toward society. Finally, we can plan for the best and most ideal way to make a better society than now. Eventually, we can examine the factors that disturb the creation of Utopia. Even if we cannot remove or eliminate them, we can think of ways to attenuate them. Thus, to sum up, the value of pursuing Utopia totally depends on realizing the fact that Utopia can't exist in reality.  Dreaming of Utopia can be a great tool for a better society and as long as we recognize it, our future would not be that miserable. Thus, we should not stop dreaming about Utopia even though we know it cannot exist in reality. Accepting the origin of the word Utopia, is the most important step toward our better future.

References

Andrew, Brown. (2013, August 2). Evolution will punish the selfish? It's not as simple as that. The guardian. Retrieved from http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfree/andrewbrown/2013/aug/02/evolution-punish-selfish-not-simple

Communism (n.d.). In Encyclopedia Britannica. Retrieved from http://global.britannica.com/EBchecked/topic/129104/communism

French Revolution. (n.d.). In British Library. Retrieved from http://www.bl.uk/learning/histcitizen/21cc/utopia/revolution1/troops1/troops.html


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Melissa, Hogenboom. (2013, August 2). Selfish traits not favoured by evolution, study shows. BBC. Retrieved from http://www.bbc.com/news/science-environment-23529849


Revolution. (n.d.). In British LibraryRetrieved from http://www.bl.uk/learning/histcitizen/21cc/utopia/revolution1/revolution2.html

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2014년 12월 6일 토요일

Peer review

Peer review

20401 강덕현
020401dukhyun.blogspot.com



Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
.4.................................................................................................................................................

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
The reasons are not organized well. After reading it, I can't remember the information about why early education is bad. Thus, to improve this essay i think the author should make an effort to organize the reasons well. ..............................................................................................................................................

Thesis
What is the thesis?
early childhood education is not effective.
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Is the thesis clear and debatable?
.Yes/ Yes...............................................................................................................................................

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
early childhood education is not effective.
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Any other thoughts?
This is quite interesting topic, but if  I write on this topic, analyzing the current status of Korean parents' worries (because they might know about this fact would be also interesting. ..................................................................................................................................................

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
The contents exist. I am certain. 하지만 내용이 구분이 되어 있지 않아서 다 섞여 있는 느낌. ..................................................................................................................................................

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
통계 자료를 사용한 것은 좋으나 조기 교육으로 고통받는 아이들의 실태라던지 좀 더 재미있는 내용이 오면 좋을 듯. ..................................................................................................................................................

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
Narration 과 confirmation이 구분이 안된다. ..................................................................................................................................................

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
네..................................................................................................................................................

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
Refutation 에는 이런 질문이 올 수 도 있을 것 같다. 선행학습도 효과적으로, 창의성을 살리면서 할 수 있지 않느냐? 아이들이 원하는 방법으로 시키면 되지 않느냐? 그럴 경우에도 효과가 없나요? .................................................................................................................................................

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
좋은데, 너무 인트로 덕션이랑 겹치는 느낌? 좀 더 세고 강렬한 결론이 필요할 듯. .................................................................................................................................................

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
.organization. definition of early education .................................................................................................................................................

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
동의합니다..................................................................................................................................................

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의합니다..................................................................................................................................................

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
안바뀜.................................................................................................................................................

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
나는 저자의 주장에 동의하는 입장이기 때문에 이 에세이에 공감이 갔지만 선행 학습도 아이들의 창의성을 높일 수 있게끔, 강제적이지 않은 방법으로 실행할 수 있다면 ? 이러한 반박도 있을 수 있지 않을까요. ..................................................................................................................................................

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
네.................................................................................................................................................

Is the research from appropriate sources?
.네.................................................................................................................................................

Are the sources obvious?
네..................................................................................................................................................

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네.................................................................................................................................................

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
선행학습 외에도 아이들을 발달시킬 수 있는 방법이 이러이러한 게 있다고 설명이 있으면 좋을 것 같다. 부모님의 사랑과 관심 이런 것 말고도. ...............................................................................................................................................





20402강수빈
http://20402kangsubin.blogspot.kr/

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3..................................................................................................................................................

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
논지가 무엇인지 잘 모르겠다. 음악은 사람들에게 긍정적인 영향을 미칠 수 있다는 것이 논지인가? 만약 그렇다면 처음 introduction 부분에 논지를 썼어야 한다. ..................................................................................................................................................

Thesis
What is the thesis?
음악은 사람에게 (마음에? )  긍정적인 영향을 미칠 수 있다. ..................................................................................................................................................

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
명확하지만 당연해 보인다. .................................................................................................................................................

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
음악은 우리 생활 속 깊숙히 자리잡혀 있다. 음악을 공부할 때에 듣는 것이 공부에 방해가 안 된다. 혹은 음악의 상업적 이용이 좋다 나쁘다. 이런 식으로 썼을 것 같다. .................................................................................................................................................

Any other thoughts?
인트로에 음악이 이렇게 부정적으로 인식이 되기도 한다, 특히 이러이러한 면에서. 이렇듯 요즘엔 음악의 중요성과 긍정적인 영향을 잘 모르고 있는 사람들이 많은데 음악은 사실 엄청 긍적적인 영향도 미친다. 이런식으로 쓰면 좋을 것 같다. ..................................................................................................................................................

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
.어디까지가 narration 인지 잘 모르겠다. 그것 외에는 다 요소가 포함되어 있는듯. .................................................................................................................................................

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 
흥미롭지는 않다. 음악이 우리 삶에 자리잡고 있는 것은 다 아는 사실이고,  thesis 와 밀접한 관련에 있는 것 같지 않다. ..................................................................................................................................................

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
음악에 긍정적인 영향을 받은 역사적 인물들을 나열했는데, 이것과 confirmation 이 뭐가 다른지 잘 모르겠다. ................................................................................................................................................

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
그렇다. 이유를 잘 나열했다. .................................................................................................................................................

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
이유는 무엇인지 알겠는데 그것을 지지해주는 리서치나 연구 같은 것이 필요할 것 같다. ..................................................................................................................................................

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 
결론이 요약은 잘 했는데 임팩트가 부족한 느낌이다. ......................................................................................................................

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
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Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
동의한다..................................................................................................................................................

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
동의한다..................................................................................................................................................

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
.-.................................................................................................................................................

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
결론과 서론부분을 좀 더 강하고 흥미롭게 쓸 필요가 있다. 그리고 narration 과 confirmation 간의 구분이 확실하게 되어야 한다. narration은 주제와 관련하여 독자들이 알아야할 정보를 제공하는 부분인데 흠.. ..................................................................................................................................................

Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
그렇다. 하지만 몇몇 .부분에서는 리서치 없이 자신의 의견만을 쓴 부분도 보인다. 역사적 인물들의 사례를 늘어 놓은 후 결론을 내는 부분도 그렇고, refutation 부분도 그렇다. ...............................................................................................................................................

Is the research from appropriate sources?
그렇다...............................................................................................................................................

Are the sources obvious?
그렇다................................................................................................................................

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네..................................................................................................................................................

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
마지막에 refutation 부분에 음악이 집중력을 해칠 수 도 있다는 말에 반박이 약하다. 자신의 생각이 아닌 학술 연구라던가 전문가의 말을 이용해서 반박을 하면 좋을 듯 싶다. 
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2014년 11월 14일 금요일

Second draft

Second draft


               In the morning, you wake up, hearing the news of war in the Middle East or the fights between politicians. On the subway to school or work you find the people who are trying to ignore the homeless reaching out their hands for money. You watch people fighting on the road with their cars crashed. In this endless cycle of life, you may once have thought and desired to live in Utopia. However, do you think that Utopia can exist? For a long time, maybe during the existence of human beings, perfect world was a dream and a desire to be achieved. Even we just think about numerous novels and movies that depicted Utopia from long time ago. As people are living in a world full of problems - poverty, crime, hunger, disease, war and corruption people craved a world free of conflict, hunger and unhappiness. Thus, the concept of Utopia began to exist. Utopia is a word Thomas More invented when he wrote a book named Utopia. He coined the word‘utopia’from the Greek ou-topos meaning ‘no place’ or ‘nowhere’. But this was a pun because the almost identical Greek word ‘eu-topos- meant a good place. Thus the word Utopia intrinsically contains the question whether the perfect world can exist in reality. There were always controversies regarding the question. However, I strongly insist that Utopia cannot exist in the real world.

As I mentioned, Utopia has been a hot issue for everyone living the reality. Every person living in this world are dreaming of their own Utopia. Compared to the history, it's true that the world seems to develop in a better way. As technology is developing rapidly, and the basic rights of humans are being considered importantly. Think of how much revolutions and wars were made, and how much people fought to achieve Utopia. According to the British Library,  from 18th century, utopian ideas exploded into actions. Condorcet, Rousseau's opinions were enough to enlighten people to recognize that they have right to claim Utopia. Thus in America and in france revolutions exploded. Also in 19th century Robert Owen and Titus Salt set up socialist utopian communities. Of course, these fights and revolutions are still occurring.
               Many novels which describe Utopia show people's interests toward it. The first people who invented the word Utopia is Thomas more, who wrote the book Utopia defined Utopia on his own. The society existed on the island and people living in there had no money. People moved to other houses every 10 years to avoid obsession to their own belongings. Selected officials govern the country and these officials have intellectual capabilities. As people should share equal wealth, this society resembles that of communism.
               Not only in literature, there are many people attempting to actualize Utopia in real world. New haven, Society of the woman in the wilder, Ephrata cloister, Shakers, Harmony, Nashoba, New harmony, Brook farm, Kindgon of St. James, Oneida, Icaria, Fountain Grove, Kaweah, Roycroft, Point loma, Halcyon, Holycity, Peace mission of father divine, Drop city, Hog farm, Twin oaks, Family of mystic arts, the diggers, the farm are Utopian societies that are discovered. However if you think these Utopian communities were just the old story you're making a huge mistake.
                  If you type in "Marinaleda" in the search engine you will find many interesting articles regarding this small village in Spain. You can read it from New york times and  Wall street Journal Marinaleda has gained a huge attention recently from the progressive press. It is located 70 miles east of Seville in southern Spain's Andalusia region, this small farming village (population: 2,771) has set out to build a Communist utopia since the late 1970s. Wall street Journal describes Marinaleda as "probably the most pleasant Communist society on earth" To describe little about a village, there is complete absence of a police force. And mechanization is avoided at all costs in order to make as many people as possible do physical work. Marinaleda also offers new residents a home for just €15 per month. What I wanted to emphasize is that there are people trying to achieve real Utopia and there were lots of efforts to make Utopia. However, can those attempts end? Are those efforts can be ended one day? Now, after introducing the novel Utopia and many Utopian villages which existed and which still exists, it seems to be sure to you that people have a strong desire to actualize the Utopian world. However if you ask that question to me, I will say "no"

                   I insist that Utopia can’t exist in reality. There are several reasons why. First of all every person have different standard toward the perfect world. This is a simple thought that everyone could think of. I mean everyone wants different things because their personalities, jobs, environments, experiences, amount of money they have, family etc are all different. When you simply ask ‘What is your great pleasure’ to your friends or family members, they will answer all differently. The perfect world means that it can all suffice everyone’s desires and needs efficiently but as long as everyone wants different things it is totally impossible to make up the perfect world for everyone. A world which is perfect to you can be a Dystopia to other people. In our real live and in history, people fought and started a revolution to get what they want because due to the disparity between people’s opinions and interests they could not come to an agreement. Let me introduce French revolution as an example. Due to the France’s failure to feed its population, the exclusion of the growing bourgeoisie from political power and reluctance of the peasants to support an oppressive feudal system, the revolution was caused. People tried to escape from the reality that oppressed themselves and tried to make a world where every citizen can live happily. It brought down the monarchy, the aristocracy and the church, so old regime in France ended. However does everyone living in the world wanted the revolution to occur? No. The point is that even though majority of the men living in France wanted the revolution, not all of them wanted it. This is because every people want different society and rules. It is especially obvious when we watch the conflicts between rich and the poor which still exists today. And we already know these conflicts have been happening and will keep happening. 
                 In addition Utopia cannot exist because people cannot bear the uniformity. People must compete to become happy.  Most of the social problems occur due to the income inequality and rich get richer and the poor-get poorer cycle. Thus to prevent these problems previous Utopian societies inhibited the possession of money and shared all the resources together. And by equalizing the income they forced people to accept uniformity. However, historically, this method is not appropriate to human beings. Communism which failed clearly shows the fact. Communism was one way to make Utopia. It is the political and economic doctrine that aims to replace private property and a profit-based economy with public ownership and communal control of at least the major means of production and the natural resources of a society. This was made in order to save citizens from sweating system and violation of human rights. However when this was adapted to our reality, the fact turns out to be different. People worked without competition and incentives thus it led to the poor performance of economies. Even if competition may lead to income inequality and conflicts between people, competition between people is the basic component of the community and society of human beings. 
                       Also Utopia cannot exist because every human seek their own pleasure and interest. To be short, humans are selfish. This is not a problem of individuals’ personality. This regards to the principle of evolution. In 1974, Richard Dawkins published a book named “The selfish Gene”. It is a book which describes a gene centered view of Charles Darwin’s theory of natural selection. He argued that individual genes adapt and evolve, using organism’s body as a survival machine for its genes. Due to this mechanism, human beings become selfish. All human beings are self-centered thus act and think selfishly. All altruistic behaviors are made in order to maximize one’s inclusive fitness. Some people will think this point of view as awkward. However this book is called as the classic of evolutionary biology. Not only this, we can see many proofs that reinforce this idea. People act on their own interests. Everyone can accept this as a fact. However in Utopia, everyone cannot pursue their interests freely because it makes the society hard to maintain. Thus many novels that depict Utopia, as I mentioned before, restrict people’s desire. However this society cannot sustain as long as people are selfish.
                        To be simple, to overcome the problem of peoples' endless greed, equality can be the key to Utopia. Everyone can share their belongings thus there should be no poverty. By sharing equal amount of resources, we can prevent conflicts and fights between people.  However this idea leads to the devastated results. As I mentioned before, communism was the way to express and actualize the Utopia. Equality and uniformity were the important rule. However communism failed because of repressive environment, misallocation of resources and totalitarian regime. Why did this happened? Humans are naturally selfish. Thus even the leaders of the country could not bear the natural traits. Not even saying about communism, all of the social issues such as politicians and businessmen's bribery and embezzlement of government money,bankruptcy etc occur because of people's greediness.  
However, there are some people arguing that Utopia can exist. They can find a research which was published in Nature communications by scientists saying humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative environment by being selfish. They might want to use this source as counter argument for my reasons that go "Utopia cannot exist because humans are selfish". Some may say that this challenges a previous theory which suggested that it is preferable to be selfish and put you first. Using this source they might argue that because people evolve in a co-operative environment by being altruistic, Utopia can exist. However, according to the Guardian all of these experiments are conducted in a laboratory, with only computer simulations. It seems that when that mathematics is fitted to the wild nature, it will pretty soon break. New research suggests that co-operation helps a group evolve, but does not mean that the selfish gene theory of evolution is wrong. Thus it is obviously right in saying that as long as people are controlled by selfish gene, regardless of possibilities of altruistic behavior, humans are originally selfish. Also some might argue that as technology develops, one day, human society can be perfectly controlled by it. Thus they can argue that by developing new technology we can make Utopia. However it is totally absurd argument. Historically as technology developed, new problems came out. According to Harry R. Lewishistory is an endless cycle of control and new technology. New technology usually brings not only convenience but also the social instability and new problems. Even by the time a measure of social stability has evolved, other new technologies give birth to unanticipated problems. Thus even if new technology can make our lives more comfortable, it cannot totally change our societies into Utopia.

Therefore, Utopia cannot exist in reality. It's because firstly, people have different standards toward Utopia, which we can easily recognize when we see the endless fight between the poor and the rich. Secondly, people should compete. Through competition, people can get incentives especially when they perform better than any other or invent new things which other people could not think of. Even if competition can occur problems, it is the basic component of human society, which help each member of society to perform better. Thirdly, humans are naturally selfish. Undeniably, people are controlled by their own selfish gene. And even, it's unnecessary to mention  Richard Dawkins, because there are so many social issues which show the greediness of people such as bribery and embezzlement. 
Some can say that my argument takes away the last hope for the humanity. However, I am not saying that our society is full of selfish and greedy people and severe competition so that we don't have any hope. I am not saying that we can't make our future brighter. Like I mentioned before, all I want to argue is that we must learn how to use the concept of Utopia in our own lives. And to do that, I insist that understanding the concept of Utopia correctly, understanding Utopia as the thing that we can’t achieve even if we should always try to achieve, is the most important thing.  
If we continue daydreaming about Utopia, which does not exist, it is obvious that so many precious opportunities to change the society will be lost. If we continue believing in Utopia, we must or try to ignore the innate greediness of human, the necessity of competition and diversity between people. However, if we stop dreaming about it, if we notice the nonexistence of Utopia, then we can finally have critical perspective toward society. Finally, we can plan for the best and most ideal way to make a better society than now. Eventually, we can examine the factors that disturb the creation of Utopia. Even if we cannot remove or eliminate them, we can think of ways to attenuate them. Thus to sum up, the value of pursuing Utopia totally depends on realizing the fact that Utopia can't exist in reality.  Dreaming of Utopia can be a great tool for a better society and as long as we recognize it our future would not be that miserable. Thus we should not stop dreaming about Utopia even though we know it cannot exist in reality. Accepting the origin of the word Utopia, is the most important step toward our better future.





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