2014년 10월 26일 일요일

First draft

  
Can Utopia exist?

In the morning, you wake up, hearing the news of war in the Middle East or the fights between politicians. On the subway to school or work you find the people trying to ignore the homeless reaching out their hands for money. You watch people fighting on the road with their cars crashed. In this endless cycle of life, you may once have thought and desired to live in Utopia. However, do you think that Utopia can exist? For a long time, maybe during the existence of human beings, perfect world was a dream and a desire to be achieved. As people are living in a world full of problems - poverty, crime, hunger, disease, war and corruption people craved a world free of conflict, hunger and unhappiness. Thus, the concept of Utopia began to exist. Utopia is a word Thomas More invented when he wrote a book named Utopia. He coined the word ‘utopia’from the Greek ou-topos meaning ‘no place’ or ‘nowhere’. But this was a pun because the almost identical Greek word ‘eu-topos- meant a good place. Thus the word Utopia intrinsically contains the question whether the perfect world can exist in reality. There were always controversies regarding the question. However, I strongly insist that Utopia cannot exist in the real world.

As I mentioned, Utopia has been a hot issue for everyone living the reality. Every person living in this world are dreaming of their own Utopia. Compared to the history, it's true that the world seems to develop in a better way. As technology is developing rapidly, and the basic rights of humans are being considered importantly. Think of how much revolutions and wars were made, and how much people fought to achieve Utopia. From 18th century, utopian ideas exploded into actions. Condorcet, Rousseau's opinions were enough to enlighten people to recognize that they have right to claim Utopia. Thus in America and in france revolutions exploded. Also in 19th century Robert Owen and Titus Salt set up socialist utopian communities. Of course, these fights and revolutions are still occurring.
Many novels which describe Utopia show people's interests toward it. The first people who invented the word Utopia is Thomas more, who wrote the book Utopia defined Utopia on his own. The society existed on the island and people living in there had no money. People moved to other houses every 10 years to avoid obsession to their own belongings. Selected officials govern the country and these officials have intellectual capabilities. As people should share equal wealth, this society resembles that of communism.
Not only in literature, there are many people attempting to actualize Utopia in real world. New haven, Society of the woman in the wilder, Ephrata cloister, Shakers, Harmony, Nashoba, New harmony, Brook farm, Kindgon of St. James, Oneida, Icaria, Fountain Grove, Kaweah, Roycroft, Point loma, Halcyon, Holycity, Peace mission of father divine, Drop city, Hog farm, Twin oaks, Family of mystic arts, the diggers, the farm are utopian societies that are discovered. However if you think these utopian communities were just the old story you're making a huge mistake. 
If you type in "Marinaleda" in the search engine you will find many interesting articles regarding this small village in Spain. You can read it from New york times and wall street journal. Marinaleda has gained a huge attention lately from the progressive press. It is located 70 miles east of Seville in southern Spain's Andalusia region, this small farming village (population: 2,771) has set out to build a Communist utopia since the late 1970s. Wall street Journal describes Marinaleda as "probably the most pleasant Communist society on earth" To describe little about a village, there is complete absence of a police force. And mechanization is avoided at all costs to put as many people as possible to physical work. Marinaleda also offers new residents a home for just €15 per month. What I wanted to emphasize is that there are people trying to achieve real Utopia for all people and there were lots of efforts to make Utopia. However, can those attempts end? Are those efforts can be ended one day? In my opinion, I will say "no" Now, it seems to be sure that people have a strong desire to actualize the utopian world when we see the novels and real villages that people made.

However I insist that Utopia can’t exist in reality. There are several reasons why. First of all every person have different standard toward the perfect world. This is a simple thought that everyone could think of. When you simply ask ‘What is your great pleasure’ to your friends or family members, they will answer all differently. The perfect world means that it can all suffice everyone’s desires and needs efficiently but as long as everyone wants different things it is totally impossible to make up the perfect world for everyone. A world which is perfect to you can be a dystopia to other people.In our real live and in history people fought and start a revolution to get what they want because due to the disparity between people’s opinions and interests they could not come to an agreement. Let me introduce French revolution as an example. Due to the France’s failure to feed its population, the exclusion of the growing bourgeoisie from political power and reluctance of the peasants to support an oppressive feudal system, the revolution was caused. People tried to escape from the reality that oppressed themselves and tried to make a world where every citizen can live happily. It brought down the monarchy, the aristocracy and the church so old regime in France ended. However does everyone living in the world wanted the revolution to occur? No. The point is that it is right that majority of the men living in France wanted the revolution but not all of them wanted it. This is due to the fight between the rich and the poor which still exists today. Every people want different society and rules. And we already know that this kept going without making
In addition Utopia cannot exist because people must compete. Most of the social problems occur due to the income inequality and rich get richer and the poor-get poorer cycle. Thus to prevent these problems previous Utopian societies inhibited the possession of money and shared all the resources together. And by equalizing the income they forced people to accept uniformity. However, historically, this method is not appropriate to human beings. Communism which failed clearly shows the fact. Communism was one way to make Utopia. It is the political and economic doctrine that aims to replace private property and a profit-based economy with public ownership and communal control of at least the major means of production and the natural resources of a society. This was made in order to save citizens from sweating system and violation of human rights. However when this was adapted to our reality, the fact turns out to be different. People worked without competition and incentives thus it led to the poor performance of economies. While competition may lead to income inequality and conflicts between people without it, the community and society of human beings cannot sustain.
Also Utopia cannot exist because every human seek their own pleasure and interest. To be short, humans are selfish. This is not a problem of individuals’ personality. This regards to the principle of evolution. In 1974, Richard Dawkins published a book named “The selfish Gene”. It is a book which describes a gene centered view of Charles Darwin’s theory of natural selection. He argued that individual genes adapt and evolve, using organism’s body as a survival machine for its genes. Due to this mechanism, human beings become selfish. All human beings are self-centered thus act and think selfishly. All altruistic behaviors are made in order to maximize one’s inclusive fitness. Some people will think this point of view as awkward. However this book is called as the classic of evolutionary biology. Not only this, we can see many proofs that reinforce this idea. People act on their own interests. Everyone can accept this as a fact. However in Utopia, everyone cannot pursue their interests freely because it makes the society hard to maintain. Thus many novels that depict Utopia, as I mentioned before, restrict people’s desire. However this society cannot sustain as long as people are selfish.
To be simple equality can be the key to Utopia. Everyone can share their belongings thus there should be no poverty. However this idea leads to the devastated results. Communism was the way to express and actualize the Utopia. Equality and uniformity were the important rule. However communism failed because of repressive environment, misallocation of resources and totalitarian regime. Why did this happened? Humans are naturally selfish. Thus even the leaders of the country could not bear the natural traits.

However, there are some people arguing that Utopia can exist. They can find a research which was published in Nature communications by scientists saying humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative environment by being selfish. They might want to use this source as counter argument for my reasons that go "Utopia cannot exist because humans are selfish".  Some may say that this challenges a previous theory which suggested that it is preferable to be selfish and put you first. Using this source they might argue that because people evolve in a co-operative environment by being altruistic, Utopia can exist.  However all of these experiments are conducted in a laboratory, with only computer simulations. It seems that when that mathematics is fitted to the wild nature, it will pretty soon break. New research suggests that co-operation helps a group evolve, but does not mean that the selfish gene theory of evolution is wrong. Thus it is obviously right in saying that as long as people are controlled by selfish gene, regardless of possibilities of altruistic behavior, humans are originally selfish.  Also some might argue that as technology develops, one day human society can be perfectly controlled by it. Thus they can argue that by developing new technology we can make Utopia. However it is totally absurd argument. Historically as technology developed, new problems came out. According to Lewis, Harry R. history is an endless cycle of control and new technology. Thus even if new technology can make our lives more comfortable, it cannot totally change our societies into Utopia. 

Therefore Utopia cannot exist in reality. It's because people have different standards toward Utopia and people should compete and humans are naturally selfish. It is the most important thing to remember that Utopia does not exist in reality. If we continue daydreaming about Utopia, which does not exist, it is obvious that lose so many precious opportunities to change the society. Knowing the nonexistence of Utopia leads to critical perspective toward society making people plan for the best and most ideal way to make a better society. The value of pursuing Utopia totally depends on realizing the fact that Utopia can't exist in reality. However as long as human dream and pursue Utopia, there always a possibility to a better world. In this perspective, Utopia is something that we should always try to achieve knowing that we can’t. Dreaming of Utopia can be a great tool for a better society and as long as we recognize it our future would not be that miserable. Thus we should not stop dreaming about Utopia even though we know it cannot exist in reality. That can be an important step toward our better future.





http://www.bbc.com/news/science-environment-23529849
http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfree/andrewbrown/2013/aug/02/evolution-punish-selfish-not-simple









Refutation and Concession

Refutation and Concession

There are some people arguing that Utopia can exist. They can find a research which was published in Nature communications by scientists saying humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative environment by being selfish. They might want to use this source as counter argument for my reasons which goes "Utopia cannot exist because humans are selfish".  Some may say that this challenges a previous theory which suggested that it is preferable to be selfish and put you first. Using this source they might argue that because people evolve in a co-operative environment by being altruistic, Utopia can exist.  However all of these experiments are conducted in a laboratory, with only computer simulations. It seems that when that mathematics is fitted to the wild nature, it will pretty soon break. New research suggests that co-operation helps a group evolve, but does not mean that the selfish gene theory of evolution is wrong. Thus it is obviously right in saying that as long as people are controlled by selfish gene, regardless of possibilities of altruistic behavior, humans are originally selfish.  Also some might argue that as technology develops, one day human society can be perfectly controlled by it. Thus they can argue that by developing new technology we can make Utopia. However it is totally absurd argument. Historically as technology developed, new problems came out. According to Lewis, Harry R. history is an endless cycle of control and new technology. Thus even if new technology can make our lives more comfortable, it cannot totally change our societies into Utopia. 

2014년 10월 25일 토요일

Conclusion

Instead, try to hearken back to the narration and the issues. Remind your readers what’s at stake and try to show why your thesis provides the best solution to the issue being faced. This gives an impression of the rightness and importance of your argument, and suggests its larger significance or long-range impact. More importantly, it gives the readers a psychological sense of closure; the argument winds up instead of breaking off.



Therefore Utopia cannot exist in reality. It's because people have different standards toward Utopia and people should compete and humans are naturally selfish. It is the most important thing to remember that Utopia does not exist in reality. If we continue daydreaming about Utopia, which does not exist, it is obvious that lose so many precious opportunities to change the society. Knowing the nonexistence of Utopia leads to critical and perspective toward society making people plan for the best and most ideal way to make a better society. The value of pursuing Utopia totally depends on realizing the fact that Utopia can't exist in reality. However as long as human dream and pursue Utopia, there always a possibility to a better world. In this perspective, Utopia is something that we should always try to achieve knowing that we can’t. Dreaming of Utopia can be a great tool for a better society and as long as we recognize it our future would not be that miserable. Thus we should not stop dreaming about Utopia even though we know it cannot exist in reality. 

2014년 10월 21일 화요일

Confirmation

1. What is my thesis?
Although there were lots of attempts to make a real Utopia it cannot exist in reality.  

2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis? 
I am using scientific research and historical facts.

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?
My arguments are mostly based on logic and scientific evidence. 

 
My Confirmation

  Now, it seems to be sure that people have a strong desire to actualize the utopian world when we see the novels and real villages that people made. However I insist that Utopia can’t exist in reality. There are several reasons why.  First of all every people have different standard toward the perfect world. This is a simple thought that everyone could think of. When you simply ask ‘What is your great pleasure’ to your friends or family members, they will answer all differently. The perfect world means that it can all suffice everyone’s desires and needs efficiently but as long as everyone wants different things it is totally impossible to make up the perfect world for everyone. A world which is perfect to you can be a dystopia to other people. 

    In our real live and in history people fought and start a revolution to get what they want because due to the disparity between people’s opinions and interests they could not come to an agreement. Let me introduce French revolution as an example. Due to the France’s failure to feed its population, the exclusion of the growing bourgeoisie from political power and reluctance of the peasants to support an oppressive feudal system, the revolution was caused. People tried to escape from the reality that oppressed themselves and tried to make a world where every citizen can live happily. It brought down the monarchy, the aristocracy and the church so old regime in France ended. However does everyone living in the world wanted the revolution to occur? No. The point is that it is right that majority of the men living in France wanted the revolution but not all of them wanted it. This is due to the fight between the rich and the poor which still exists today. Every people want different society and rules. And we already know that this kept going without making

   In addition Utopia cannot exist because people must compete. Most of the social problems occur due to the income inequality and rich get richer and the poor-get poorer cycle. Thus to prevent these problems previous Utopian societies inhibited the possession of money and shared all the resources together. And by equalizing the income they forced people to accept uniformity. However, historically, this method is not appropriate to human beings. Communism which failed clearly shows the fact.Communism was one way to make Utopia. It is the political and economic doctrine that aims to replace private property and a profit-based economy with public ownership and communal control of at least the major means of production and the natural resources of a society. This was made in order to save citizens from sweating system and violation of human rights. However when this was adapted to our reality, the fact turns out to be different. People worked without competition and incentives thus it led to the poor performance of economies. While competition may lead to income inequality and conflicts between people without it, the community and society of human beings cannot sustain.

   Also Utopia cannot exist because every human seek their own pleasure and interest. To be short, humans are selfish. This is not a problem of individuals’ personality. This regards to the principle of evolution. In 1974, Richard Dawkins published a book named “The selfish Gene”. It is a book which describes a gene centered view of Charles Darwin’s theory of natural selection. He argued that individual genes adapt and evolve, using organism’s body as a survival machine for its genes. Due to this mechanism, human beings become selfish. All human beings are self-centered thus act and think selfishly. All altruistic behaviors are made in order to maximize one’s inclusive fitness. Some people will think this point of view as awkward. However this books is called as the classic of evolutionary biology. Not only this, we can see many proofs that reinforce this ideas. People act on their own interests. Everyone can accept this as a fact. However in Utopia, everyone cannot pursue their interests freely because it makes the society hard to maintain. Thus many novels that depict Utopia, as I mentioned before, restrict people’s desire. However this society cannot sustain as long as people are selfish.
 
To be simple equality can be the key to Utopia. Everyone can share their belongings thus there should be no poverty. However this idea leads to the devastated results. Communism was the way to express and actualize the Utopia. Equality and uniformity was the important rule. However communism failed because of repressive environment, misallocation of resources and totalitarian regime. Why this happened? Humans are naturally selfish. Thus even the leaders of the country could not bear the natural traits. 

2014년 10월 20일 월요일

Narration

My persuasive argument thesis is: Although there are many people who believe Utopia can exist, they will never exist.


1. What do people already know about my topic?

Everyone knows about the concept of Utopia. Everyone also wants to live in Utopia, too. Also these days, there are several movies and novels which depict the Utopian/Distopian world thus people would know a lot of the definition of Utopia. Also some people would know the tries of humans to make Utopia such as communism and revolutions. 


2. What research has already been done about my topic?

1) http://www.bbc.com/news/science-environment-23529849 -  describes the new scientific research that found humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative  environment by being selfish 



2) http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfree/andrewbrown/2013/aug/02/ describes the new scientific research that insisted humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative  environment by being selfish  is wrong. 

3) http://www.bl.uk/learning/histcitizen/21cc/utopia/utopia.html - definitions of world Utopia and its history.


4) http://brbl-archive.library.yale.edu/exhibitions/utopia/utoplit.html- describes the old communities that tried make Utopia.


5) http://www.nytimes.com/2009/05/26/world/europe/26spain.html?pagewanted=all&_r=0 
http://online.wsj.com/articles/a-communist-utopia-in-spain-1411580857
Marinaleda one utopian society where  people actually gathered to make an Utopia together. 


3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

Humans will not stop working on realization of Utopia. As long as humans exist, the desire and craving for Utopia exist. However if people start to accept my argument, they'll know what they must do to make a world which is similar to Utopia. They would know the limits of human beings and thus they'll try to make another plans or studies about overcoming the obstacles. As I already mentioned, this essay is not saying "As long as people cannot make Utopia, we should stop our useless efforts". It is saying "As long as we have these problems which stop us from realizing the real Utopia, we should consider these when we try to make a world similar to Utopia"



My Narration

 

    Utopia has been a hot issue for everyone living the reality. Every people living in this world are dreaming of their own Utopia. Compared to history, it's true that the world seems to develop in a better way. As technology is developing rapidly and the basic rights of humans are being considered importantly. Think of how much revolutions and wars were made, and how much people fought to achieve Utopia on their own.  From 18th century, utopian ideas exploded into actions. Condorcet, Rousseau's opinions were enough to enlighten people to recognize that they have right to claim Utopia. Thus in America and in france revolutions exploded. Also in 19th century Robert Owen and Titus Salt set up socialist utopian communities. Of course, these fights and revolutions are still occuring. 

     Many novels that describe Utopia show people's interests toward it. The first people who invented the word Utopia is Thomas more, who wrote the book Utopia defined Utopia on his own. The society existed on an island and people living in there had no money. People moved to other houses every 10 years to avoid obsession to their own belongings. Selected officials govern the country and these officials have intellectual capabilities. As people should share equal wealth, this society resembles that of communism.

    Not only in literature, there are many people attempting to actualize Utopia in real world.  New haven, Society of the woman in the wilder, Ephrata cloister, Shakers, Harmony, Nashoba, New harmony, Brook farm, Kindgon of St. James, Oneida, Icaria, Fountain Grove, Kaweah, Roycroft, Point loma, Halcyon, Holycity, Peace mission of father divine, Drop city, Hog farm, Twin oaks, Family of mystic arts, the diggers, the farm are utopian societies that are discovered. However if you think these utopian communities were just the old story you're making a huge mistake. 

  If you type in "Marinaleda" in the search engine you will find many interesting articles regarding this small village in spain.  You can read it from New york times and wall street journal. Marinaleda has gained a huge attention lately from the progressive press.  It is located 70 miles east of Seville in southern Spain's Andalusia region, this small farming village (population: 2,771) has set out to build a Communist utopia since the late 1970s.  Wall street Journal describes Marinaleda as "probably the most pleasant Communist society on earth" To describe little about a village, there is complete absence of a police force. And mechanization is avoided at all costs to put as many people as possible to physical work. Marinaleda also offers new residents a home for just €15 per month. What I wanted to emphasize is that there are people trying to achieve real Utopia for all people and there were lots of efforts to make Utopia. However can those attempts end? Are those efforts can be ended one day? In my opinion I will say "no"


2014년 10월 19일 일요일

Research

Research 1
Source : http://www.bl.uk/learning/histcitizen/21cc/utopia/utopia.html

My Topic: Utopia can't exist in reality. 

What I hope to learn from this source: I want to define the word Utopia and want to know about its history.

Notes:

1. In 1516 Sir Thomas More wrote the first 'Utopia'. He coined the word 'utopia' from the Greek ou-topos meaning 'no place' or 'nowhere'.  

2. H G Wells described a parallel earth upon which the rational and scientific are perfectly reconciled with spiritual discipline and belief. Francis Bacon describes a remote utopian island governed entirely by reason and science. Thomas Campanella imagined a perfect society in which religion and reason work in total harmony.

3. In the 18th century utopian ideas exploded into social and political action. 
Thinkers like de Condorcet, Rousseau and Washington provided citizens with the arguments they needed to fight for a better and fairer world. And revolution on the other hand explodes into reality.  

4. In the 19th century( At a time of massive industrial growth) Robert Owen and Titus Salt (both industrialists and reformers) set up (socialist utopias)model communities to house the workers at their textile mills. 
Owen's New Lanark, in central Scotland and Salt's Saltaire, in West Yorkshire were self-contained communities built around textile mills. Workers were given a better quality of life than was available elsewhere.


Final Thoughts: I researched about the definition of Utopia and many Utopias that people tried to pursue and real action of people to make a better world. I think this can help me strengthen my arguments toward Utopia, especially about the people who seek utopia exist.





Research 2
Source: http://brbl-archive.library.yale.edu/exhibitions/utopia/utopcom.html
My Topic: Utopia can't exist in reality

What I hope to learn from this source: I want to know about the existence of people who actually gathered to make an Utopia together. 

Notes:
Utopian communities
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11638New HavenNew Haven, Connecticut
Pennsylvania German ColoniesPennsylvania
21694Germantown, Pennsylvania
31732Ephrata, Pennsylvania
41774Shakersnear Albany, New York
51805HarmonyHarmony, Indiana
61825NashobaNashoba, Tennessee
71825New HarmonyHarmony, Indiana
81841Brook FarmWest Roxbury, Massachusetts
91847Kingdom of St. JamesBeaver Island, Michigan
101848OneidaOneida, New York
111849IcariaNavoo, Illinois
121875Fountain GroveSanta Rosa, California
131886KaweahTulare County, California
141894RoycroftE. Aurora, New York
151897Point LomaSan Diego, California
161903HalcyonOceana, California
171919Holy Citynear Santa Cruz, California
181919Peace Mission of Father DivineBrooklyn, New York
191965Drop CityTrinidad, Colorado
201966Hog FarmTaos, New Mexico
211967Twin OaksLouisa, Virginia
221968Family of Mystic ArtsOregon
231967The DiggersCalifornia
241971The FarmSummerton, Tennessee

Final Thoughts: It can be a source to claim that there are many people who try to make Utopia come true. Also many people are interested in making Utopia and living in there. However many utopian communities didn't lats long. I can point that when in my arguments. 






Research 3

Source:  http://www.nytimes.com/2009/05/26/world/europe/26spain.html?pagewanted=all&_r=0
http://online.wsj.com/articles/a-communist-utopia-in-spain-1411580857

My Topic:  Utopia can't exist in reality

What I hope to learn from this source: There were people who actually gathered to make an Utopia together. Utopian communities are not the societies that were made by imagination but they were really created in reality. 

Notes:
1. Marinaleda is located 70 miles east of Seville in southern Spain's Andalusia region, this small farming village (population: 2,771) has set out to build a Communist utopia since the late 1970s. 

2. Marinaleda has garnered a great deal of attention lately from the progressive press. The village has even been the subject of an admiring book, "The Village Against the World," published in 2013.
3. Marinaleda is probably the most pleasant Communist society on earth. The community shares some of the central characteristics of all Communist societies, not least a hyper-ideological government and a healthy dose of economic absurdity.
4. While the rest of Spain gorged on cheap credit to buy overpriced houses, the people of Marinaleda were building their own, mortgage-free, under a municipal program.

5. Mechanization is avoided at all costs. The idea is to put as many people as possible to physical work. Every cooperative farmer earns the same daily pay of just over €40 ($50) for 6½ hours of work.
6.  Marinaleda also offers new residents a home for just €15 per month.

 7. There are some Criticisms. Critics say Mr. Sánchez’s claims are exaggerated and that he has succeeded in dividing up misery rather than creating wealth. By promoting low-productivity farm jobs, he has kept voters dependent on him for work and handouts, they say.
Final thoughts : This village can be an example of Utopia where people can live happily without any conflicts. However there are some criticisms to this village, and there still exists limits. Thus this is the point where i have to focus on while i write essay about the topic. 




Research 4
Source : Selfish traits not favoured by evolution, study shows By Melissa Hogenboom http://www.bbc.com/news/science-environment-23529849


My Topic: Utopia can't exist in reality.

What I hope to learn from this source: I wanted to use biological research as my evidence when i try to argue that it is right in saying people are naturally selfish. However I found a new research that goes like humans must live in a co-operative environment. I wanted to know more about this new research which can attack my argument. 
Notes: 1. Humans and animals could not evolve in a co-operative environment by being selfish, scientists say. This challenges a previous theory which suggested it was preferable to put yourself first. Instead, it pays to be co-operative, shown in a model of "the prisoner's dilemma", a scenario of game theory - the study of strategic decision-making. Published in Nature Communications, the team says their work shows that exhibiting only selfish traits would have made us become extinct.




2. These latest findings contradict a 2012 study where it was found that selfish people could get ahead of more co-operative partners, which would create a world full of selfish beings. A previous study found that selfish strategies were favourable


3. In 1974, Richard Dawkins published a gene-centred view of Charles Darwin's theory of natural selection. He argued that it was not groups or organisms that adapt and evolve, but individual genes and each living organism's body was a survival machine for its genes. Prof Andrew Coleman from Leicester University explains that this new work suggests that co-operation helps a group evolve, but does not argue against the selfish gene theory of evolution. Rather, he adds, it helps selfish genes survive as they reap the awards of inhabiting co-operative groups.



Final Thoughts: In fact, I considered the reason Utopia can't exist was because of humans selfishness. This idea came from the selfish gene theory of evolution which i heard before. However this new research that was published recently suggests that people should cooperate, not just being selfish. Maybe I should find some other information that can still reinforce my opinion. 





Research 5

Source :   Evolution will punish the selfish? It's not as simple as that
http://www.theguardian.com/commentisfree/andrewbrown/2013/aug/02/evolution-punish-selfish-not-simple
My Topic: Utopia can't exist in reality.
What I hope to learn from this source: There were some articles related to new research that goes like evolution punish selfish people. These articles oppose the arguments of new research. I can use them when i defend my arguments. 
Notes: 
1.None of these experiments are conducted in the wild. They are all computer simulations. This is another reason to be slightly sceptical of all these grand results – it's possible that when the pretty mathematics are fitted to the ugly world, they will break. But that's true of pretty much all the kind of science that makes news. There's nothing special to biology about it.

Final thoughts : There are some people who disagree with the results of recent study. I can maybe use this as my counterargument while telling some historical facts that shows the selfishness of human beings. Also i can add selfish gene theory of evolution. 


2014년 10월 6일 월요일

First draft introduction

The introduction of my first draft


In the morning you wake up, hearing the news of war in the middle east or the fights between politicians. On the subway to school or work you find the people trying to ignore the homeless reaching out their hands for money. You watch people fighting on the road with their cars crashed. In this endless cycle of life you may once have thought and desired living in Utopia. However, do you think that Utopia can exist? For a long time, maybe during the existence of human beings, perfect world was a dream and a desire to be achieved. As people are living in a world full of problems - poverty, crime, hunger, disease, war and corruption people craved a world free of conflict, hunger and unhappiness. Thus the concept of Utopia began to exist. Utopia is a word Thomas More invented when he wrote a book named Utopia. He coined the word ‘utopia’from the greek ou-topos meaning ‘no place’ or ‘nowhere’. But this was a pun because the almost identical greek word ‘eu-topos- meant a good place. Thus the word Utopia intrinsically contains the question whether the perfect world can exist in reality. There were always controversies regarding the question. However I strongly insist that Utopia cannot exist in the real world.

1. Attention grabber -
 I attrated the audience by describing real lives and trying to sympathize with them with the concept of Utopia which we often think of when we have problems in our lives. Then I ask them a question so that I can point out whether Utopia can exist or not.

2. Explains the topic -
In the attention grabber I introduce all the elements of my topic: Definition of Utopia and history of it, controversies regarding the existence of Utopia.

3. My thesis -
I strongly insist that Utopia cannot exist in the real world.